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    Re: Frequency

    Post  Suuba on Thu Sep 24, 2009 8:50 pm

    i dont get how my char is creative and you could have just asked me what moves i use. to be truthfull i didnt get what you said in that whle authors note thing. sorry
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    Post  TJ on Thu Sep 24, 2009 9:06 pm

    Well, the way I see it, one of the things that made your character creative was how you were able to follow directions and use teamwrok to help you and everyone else along the way. Also, when you think about most of the other characters, you're one of the few that can actually do some pretty amazing things, next to Trini and Amu. My character for example, can't do much other than pick a fight and swing a guitar XD!
    So what I'm trying to say is, your character has talents and traits most others wouldn't likely dream of having. Although it might be a bit confusing right now, along the way things will become simpler. Pay close attention to the things the characters say to each other, even if they don't seem important, because the first...maybe 5 chapters don't really seem to have much action, but what they talk about will help you understand the bonds between them, and what it is that makes some people so amazing.
    And about that note...you don't really need to worry much about understanding it. It's just me ranting about whatevers on my mind. The less sleep I have the less sense the Author's note will make, so it'll confuse you quite~ a bit XD!
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    Re: Frequency

    Post  Suuba on Thu Sep 24, 2009 10:11 pm

    ok i kinda get it now. did i die? im not gonna get mad im just wonderin.


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    Re: Frequency

    Post  MoranZee on Fri Sep 25, 2009 2:56 am

    TeeHee! ^.^

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    Re: Frequency

    Post  MoranZee on Fri Sep 25, 2009 3:20 am

    Great, just finished reading Chapter Nine. Here are two mistakes I picked up from that chapter:

    Moranzee hide by the left side of the bar and cried. “Ugh! The three f you are pathetic!”
    ................................................................................................ ^lol
    he took that chance and fire(needs a D, past tense) two shots from both his guns
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    Post  TJ on Fri Sep 25, 2009 4:10 am

    kk I'll correct those mistakes X3.
    Anyway, I won't say whether you're character is dead or not yet Su,but I'll let you decide that one XD.What happens in the next chapter will give you an answer.It'll also have a bit of a twist there.Should heat things up quite a bit.
    No wait...the part where you hide was right. If I put it into past tense, the grammar would be wrong, and at the time I think its more of a present tense thing.
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    Post  Suuba on Fri Sep 25, 2009 4:40 am

    how can i decide if i dont know>.>
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    Post  TJ on Fri Sep 25, 2009 9:45 am

    By that i meant you should guess which one it could be. You don't need to tell me which you think it is, and eventually you'll find out what happens next XD. But if there was one you preferred, you can tell me. I'm having a hard time deciding on what I should do with the story in Chapter 10, but after that it should be fine.
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    Re: Frequency

    Post  Suuba on Fri Sep 25, 2009 3:23 pm

    i still kinda dont get it:\
    dont blame me for bein brainless>.<


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    Post  MoranZee on Fri Sep 25, 2009 5:32 pm

    Well if it's present tense then it should have an S on the end of hide.

    It seems like these days... only TJ,Suuba and me are only talking... and why hasn't anyone brought up the treasure hunting contest?Is it like forgotten?
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    Post  Suuba on Fri Sep 25, 2009 5:55 pm

    probley idk. i havent forgot about it. im workin on gettin everything xD
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    Post  TJ on Sat Sep 26, 2009 5:00 am

    I didn't either. I added a couple new things to the prize list XD.

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    Post  MoranZee on Sat Sep 26, 2009 5:40 am

    I c...
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    Re: Frequency

    Post  Suuba on Sat Sep 26, 2009 12:04 pm

    is ch. 10 almost done? im just wonderin xD
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    Post  TJ on Sun Sep 27, 2009 4:28 am

    weeeeeeell...to be honest,not really XD.I've been wasting a lot of time so I haven't made good progress in a while.I'll get back on it once I sort a few things out xD

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    Re: Frequency

    Post  MoranZee on Sun Sep 27, 2009 6:24 pm

    Yep... those times when you can't be stuffed... happens to me 60% of my lifetime...=_=
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    Re: Frequency

    Post  TJ on Sat Oct 03, 2009 7:50 pm

    Author's Note
    October 3
    Today I finished Chapter 10, after much slacking. While reading through chapter 9, I couldn't help but realize that I made a critical mistake. This is where I went wrong: He jumped back over the two and grabbed her by the neck, wrapping his legs around hers, then rolled onto his back and shouted to Amu Su, “I’m in position!” Amu Su crept over- As you can see,I got too distracted or something and made a HUGE mistake, which i finally took the time to look over and fix.I'll be sure to get more sleep from here on in to prevent that >.>. If you see any other mistakes like that,or if they even seem like a mistake be sure to warn me XD.I'll have it fixed as soon as possible.
    On another note, Chapter 10 goes out like a sparkler with a very sad ending. Although Amu reached her goal and Choen was beaten to a pulp, it seems that this party just can't seem to find a moment of happiness.This chapter also entered a more confusing sub-plot that speaks of the origins of the main character.Probably makes you wonder,"who would believe a load of bull like that?" But hey, you never know,it could be true.Others might question what kind of relationship the main character and Choen have.All will be revealed in time...
    When I was doing Chapter 10,it got me thinking.I knew what I wanted to do for the story,and it was likely obvious what choice my character would make for Choen's request.Then I wondered, what would happen if he DID go?After that I decided once Frequency ended I would follow through with another story that branches from Chapter 9, that will tell what would happen if the main character chose not to be good.I think it'll be an interesting touch for the story.
    Lastly,I couldn't fit the text for Chapter 10 in that post so I moved it down one. On that note,that's all for now everyone. I hope you continue to read this little story wrriten by me ^^. If you like, you can criticize me for all my screw-ups and for murdering a few of the characters.

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    Re: Frequency

    Post  MoranZee on Sun Oct 04, 2009 12:29 am

    Nice! Razz
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    Re: Frequency

    Post  Suuba on Sun Oct 04, 2009 4:46 am

    cool
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    Re: Frequency

    Post  Suuba on Sun Oct 04, 2009 3:31 pm

    awww man i died x.x oh well XD
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    Re: Frequency

    Post  TJ on Sun Oct 04, 2009 5:45 pm

    Some characters might be gone,but never forgoten ^^.


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    Re: Frequency

    Post  Suuba on Sun Oct 04, 2009 7:38 pm

    yeah i know XD. how many chapters is there gonna be? just wonderin xD
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    Post  TJ on Sun Oct 04, 2009 8:21 pm

    By a rough guess,I'd say about 16.Around there I think XD.


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    Re: Frequency

    Post  Suuba on Sun Oct 04, 2009 8:44 pm

    kk xD.
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    Re: Frequency

    Post  Suuba on Thu Oct 08, 2009 3:19 pm

    found one mistake in ch 11

    Amu and Tetty walked from the distance towards. it was form lol

    the tuxedo part was funny lol, XD i was like wtf lol


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